A Feedback Journal., A Feedback Journal #1
Date: June 10, 2023
Course: English Composition
Received: Week 3 Assignment – Essay Draft
Feedback Source: Instructor Summary
The instructor provided feedback on my essay draft, focusing on the organization and clarity of my ideas. They mentioned that my thesis statement was strong and provided a clear direction for the essay. However, they suggested that I reorganize some paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas and offered specific suggestions on how to achieve that. They also pointed out a few instances where my arguments were not fully supported with evidence and recommended incorporating more examples to strengthen my points.
A Feedback Journal; Action Taken: I reviewed the feedback and revised my essay accordingly. I restructured the paragraphs to create a more logical flow and added additional examples to support my arguments. I also made sure to address the issues raised by the instructor and clarify any unclear points.
A Feedback Journal; Impact: The revisions significantly improved my essay’s overall coherence and clarity. The reorganized paragraphs helped to guide the reader through the main points smoothly, and the added examples provided more substantial evidence for my arguments. The revisions also enhanced the overall impact of my essay and made it more persuasive.
Resources Used:
- Grammarly (https://www.grammarly.com/): A useful online tool for checking grammar and spelling errors.
- Purdue Online Writing Lab (https://owl.purdue.edu/) provides comprehensive writing resources, including grammar guides, citation styles, and research tips.
- The Writing Center at the University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill (https://writingcenter.unc.edu/) offers writing guides, handouts, and video tutorials on various writing topics.
A Feedback Journal #2
Date: June 10, 2023
Course: Creative Writing
Received: Workshop Discussion – Short Story
A Feedback Journal; Feedback Source: Peers Summary
During a workshop discussion in my creative writing course, my peers gave feedback on my short story. They highlighted the strengths of my character development and descriptive language, mentioning that they felt connected to the characters and immersed in the setting. However, they suggested I pay more attention to the story’s pacing, as some sections felt rushed while others dragged on. They also recommended adding more dialogue to enhance the interactions between the characters and bring them to life.
A Feedback Journal; Action Taken: I carefully considered the feedback from my peers and revised my short story accordingly. I focused on refining the pacing by trimming unnecessary details in the slower sections and expanding on important moments that felt rushed. I also incorporated more dialogue to create dynamic interactions between the characters and reveal their personalities.
A Feedback Journal; Impact: The revisions made a significant difference in the overall flow of the story. The adjusted pacing helped maintain the readers’ engagement throughout, preventing any moments of boredom or confusion. The added dialogue added depth to the characters and allowed their relationships to develop more naturally. The revisions enhanced the reading experience and strengthened the story’s impact.
Resources Used:
Works Cited
Strunk, William. The Elements of Style. New Delhi, General Press, 2019.
Works Cited
Strunk, William. The Elements of Style. New Delhi, General Press, 2019.
Thomas Media (Firm. 365 Creative Writing Prompts. Athlone, Westmeath, Ireland, Thomas Media, 2017.
A Feedback Journal; Reflection: Keeping a feedback journal has been immensely helpful in tracking my progress and identifying areas for improvement. It allows me to revisit feedback from instructors and peers, ensuring that I take advantage of all valuable insights. The journal also serves as a reminder of the actions I assumed based on the feedback received, helping me gauge the effectiveness of those actions in improving my writing. Additionally, by listing helpful resources and links in the journal, I can easily access valuable writing references and tools supporting my writing growth.
A feedback journal has become essential to my writing journey, enabling me to celebrate successes, learn from constructive criticism, and continually evolve my writing skills.
